Friday, August 19, 2011

What do you think of my poems, honestly? :)?

i liked the 1st one the most.accurate, appropriate length and interesting lines. the second is a little obscure and the final idea tends to get confusing but it's not bad at all.the last one has extremely long lines and more than a poem it seems to be more like a regurgitation of random ideas. i would change the use of will/wont in a couple of lines so that it doesn't look so repetitive, maybe "shall", the use of "you" for times in a row gets boring too, and the word "because" is totally anti-poetic,i'd also change the poem's title as the fact that the poem concludes with it is kind of cliche for me

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